Outer Space
Distant stars remind me of humanity,
so much potential for supporting life,
but only plants devoid of life recieves our shine.
The Milky way reminds me of my thoughts,
scattered aimlessly around a vast space,
yet creating a bright, beautiful fractal shape.
This Solar system reminds me of enlightenment,
How those planets recieving too much light are burned to death,
while those receiving little light suffer in the frozen depths of ignorance.
The Evolution of Eloquence 
Good thought though, —– ? what’s wrong with burnt to death or suffer in freezing.
It is what they are as it is their own norm.
They exists as they are, burning or freezing could be enjoyable for them, why not.
Only human impose the idea otherwise.
i never said it was good nor bad. I was just pointing out how the more intelligent, enlightened people tend to be “burned” by their own brilliance and the one’s who haven’t learned yet, suffer more losses and harsh times because they’re in the dark.
Beautiful imagery of thoughts, emotions and outer space…Artistically done…:)
:D thank you for the compliment
The Milky way reminds me of my thoughts,
scattered aimlessly around a vast space,
great Lines! enjoyable read.
Francina
Thank you
This is simply beautiful…an enchanted voyage…loved it!
Thanks you very much for the praise. I appreciate it greatly.
Very good poem, I like your style.
Thank you :D
A BRIGHT, BEAUTIFUL, FRACTAL, SHAPE – (phew), the culmination of aimlessly scattered thoughts
yep. Kind of like space. a bunch o aimlessly scattered matter, thrown together yet still turns out to something complete and beautiful.
If I could draw or paint I would, but I cannot so I only doodle. Words, however, are my main medium. I like the stars. I never noticed before last November how a really starry night is textured and you can see the depth in the sky. It’s quite beautiful.
I understand what you mean. I love the stars and space in general :3
It’s always great to have fractals referenced in poetry. Aside from that, I love how concise this one is, and the sort-of slant-rhyme ending is just right. (okay, so i’m not sure what to call it when the rhyme comes before the end of the line, so I went with slant). Lovely.
Ahhh… haven’t read poetry since highschool! so awesome :)
Leo, I enjoyed your work, it has depth and very allowed me to become personal with it1 (the reader is the writer etc.) It expanded as the space described. cheers.
Beautiful, man!! Congratz! Where are you from?
Thanks a lot. I’m from Dayton, Ohio
That was fantastic. :)
would like contact you one some day and share experiences… :)
I LOVE your words here…..you articulate your ideas beautifully! The notion that one can be burned by their own enlightenment – that knowing too much can cause pain and harm – is interesting and I would agree. Likewise, ignorance is not always bliss….never growing or reaching your potential, never learning to shine. The planetary imagery is perfect and I really enjoyed and related to this piece, thank you :)
Thank you for the Great Praise :D I’m glad you could relate to this piece because I honestly thought it was a little out there when I first scribbled the beginning down.